Reducing Strategies

Hello guys!
This week is about reducing strategies, and here we have two solved paragraphs!

This summary must be reduced to 115 words. Watch your professor using the sentence reducing strategies to omit unnecessary words and avoid redundant expressions.
Schenker, in her article "Smart House", in Speak Up 169, accounts for that houses will be networked making people's life easier. The electronic devices will be connected to internet and will have special chips to control different activities like housework, communications, shopping, bills or people's social life. The disadvantages of having a networked home do not seem to be significant. People will just have to pay some dollars for the chips, the connection to internet and to protect the system against cyber pirating. The services will repair themselves. The money that people can spend will not mean much, considering all the smart house benefits.
(104 words)

Monica has sent her summary to the evaluative committee of the magazine "tesol quarterly" to be considered for future publication. However it was sent back because the word limit was 115. Help Monica to reduce it and fullfil the demands of the audience to be accepted.
(1) This study went through over 1,600 marginal and end comments written on 110 first drafts of essays by 47 university ESL advanced students, considering both, the pragmatic goals for and the linguistic features of each comment. (2) Consequently, drafts of each essay were examined to observe the influence of the first draft commentary on the students' revisions and assess if the changes made in response to the teacher's feedback improved the essays. (3) A comments' proportion led to student revision, and particular kinds and forms of commentary were more helpful than others. (4) The results suggested several important implications for L2 writing instruction and for future studies on a vital but neglected topic.
(110 words)